Thursday, August 21, 2008

~Exotic Beauties of Yours~


These two exotic beauties
Showed me their language with the scripts of feelings;
Taught me the Chapters
Of various emotions;
Love,joy,care,courage
making me envision the world.
Though these beauties belong to you,
They paved the way to the colourful world of happiness-
Your heart I would say.
Oh! sweet and lovely eyes of Yours.

-Priyaa Iyer

42 comments:

Siddharth Bose said...

nice post....just change the header of your blog, it dosent match with your template

Bleeding words said...

@siddharth bose

Thanks

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Varun said...

Not really a poetry guy,but I thought it was nice:)

Jil Jil Ramamani said...

Nice verse ... interesting one

Bleeding words said...

@varun

Thanks

You know this is my 1st poetry

your post makes me to improve my writing!

Thanks a lot!
cheers

Bleeding words said...

@hakuna

Thanks

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Rinzu said...

WOW... REALLY NICE POEM...

AS IN I KNOW IT COMES STARIGHT FROM THE HEART OF A PEROSN IN LOVE...

I WRITE A LOTTT ABOUT LOVE TOO...

HERE ARE MY BLOGS ON LOVE:

www.thepoetskiss.blogspot.com
www.anodetomyfirstandlastlove.blogspot.com

i hope u would enjoy reading them... meanhwile keep ur the poetry... i would come back for more...

tk cr

Kartz said...

Not a bad start!
"Though these beauties belong to you,
They paved the way to the colourful world of happiness"- well stated...

Cherio...

Bleeding words said...

@rinzu

Hey i studied ur poems and post

they were good

i added u in my page!

thanks

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Bleeding words said...

@kartz

Thanks

I will keep trying to excel ok?

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Kishore said...

Well..nice start..

One thing wanna mention (if u req. feedback)is u were referring to "me" in the first few lines and finally you say it "Yours"..
If it read "Oh! My sweet and lovely eyes!" It would have been a lil apt i feel...

Thanks

PS: I m nt a poet .. :-)

Bleeding words said...

@kishore g

Actually i tried this !

Like as if im telling this to a person whose eyes I have described!


just a try!

Cheers
thanks

Vivek Menon said...

beautiful poem...I see an certain innocence many of your posts..Hope you can keep it always...

Laasya said...

I don't know how people ever come up with poems. I try so hard and can't even get to the first word! And it doesn't really look like your virgin attempt. So, well done! I love the pic!

Bleeding words said...

@vivek memon

Thanks

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Bleeding words said...

@dame folle

I have felt a lot like wat u felt !

still I have the thought

yet started trying!

anyway thank you!

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Anonymous said...

Wow that was a nice Poem about EYES I should say...., It was realy good...., I juz don't believe that it's your first poem,It's good....., I am not a good annotator , SO I ll just leave your poem like that.....,

Ranjeet Kr. Vimal said...

i cant comment..coz u already hv 17 comments..nice

Bleeding words said...

@antony a john

Thanks a lot for visiting my web
keep commenting my works

thanks

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Bleeding words said...

@ranjeet

Thanks

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Vinayak said...

Nice post \

Bleeding words said...

@vinayak

Thanks

Abhinav Viswambharan said...

A simple and sweet poem. Nice outlook. :)

Bleeding words said...

@Abhinav Viswambharan

thanks

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Matangi Mawley said...

good start! :) bt my take on beauty is a lil different..

http://allsettodonothing.blogspot.com/2007/01/where-is-beauty.html

cheers!

Dan* said...

nice romantic poem :)

Bleeding words said...

@matangi

Thanks

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Bleeding words said...

@dan

Thanks

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Rajesh said...

Hi Priya Iyer...dropped in from Matangi's

Well...I truly loved reading...u taught me how to convey things articulately wit jus a short write-up...loved those expression of emotions..and the pic was too good...hope u don mind me blog rolling u :)

P.S: Do visit my blog...hope it interests u

Bleeding words said...

@rajesh

Thanks for the lovely comment!

I visited ur blog

It was good!

Neat one too!

Keep blogging

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Anonymous said...

Hi sweetie.....

Its a commendable effort.Best of luck with future efforts.

Regards,
A.Rajalaxmi

Bleeding words said...

@rajalaxmi

THanks akka!

cheers
!

Sampath said...

good one man.....nice one..i am bad at poetry but still managed

Bleeding words said...

@sampath

thanks

even i bad

cheers

Karmasura said...

simple.. and brilliant..

Anonymous said...

Really nice di...keep it up..

Bleeding words said...

@attila

thanks

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Bleeding words said...

@shivasankary

Thanks d!

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Manikandan said...

Nice poem for a first timer! Keep writing!!

Bleeding words said...

@manikandan

Thanks'

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Anonymous said...

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Anonymous said...

Good article. Thank you.