These two exotic beauties
Showed me their language with the scripts of feelings;
Taught me the Chapters
Of various emotions;
Love,joy,care,courage
making me envision the world.
Though these beauties belong to you,
They paved the way to the colourful world of happiness-
Your heart I would say.
Oh! sweet and lovely eyes of Yours.
-Priyaa Iyer
42 comments:
nice post....just change the header of your blog, it dosent match with your template
@siddharth bose
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Not really a poetry guy,but I thought it was nice:)
Nice verse ... interesting one
@varun
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You know this is my 1st poetry
your post makes me to improve my writing!
Thanks a lot!
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@hakuna
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WOW... REALLY NICE POEM...
AS IN I KNOW IT COMES STARIGHT FROM THE HEART OF A PEROSN IN LOVE...
I WRITE A LOTTT ABOUT LOVE TOO...
HERE ARE MY BLOGS ON LOVE:
www.thepoetskiss.blogspot.com
www.anodetomyfirstandlastlove.blogspot.com
i hope u would enjoy reading them... meanhwile keep ur the poetry... i would come back for more...
tk cr
Not a bad start!
"Though these beauties belong to you,
They paved the way to the colourful world of happiness"- well stated...
Cherio...
@rinzu
Hey i studied ur poems and post
they were good
i added u in my page!
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@kartz
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I will keep trying to excel ok?
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Well..nice start..
One thing wanna mention (if u req. feedback)is u were referring to "me" in the first few lines and finally you say it "Yours"..
If it read "Oh! My sweet and lovely eyes!" It would have been a lil apt i feel...
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PS: I m nt a poet .. :-)
@kishore g
Actually i tried this !
Like as if im telling this to a person whose eyes I have described!
just a try!
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beautiful poem...I see an certain innocence many of your posts..Hope you can keep it always...
I don't know how people ever come up with poems. I try so hard and can't even get to the first word! And it doesn't really look like your virgin attempt. So, well done! I love the pic!
@vivek memon
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@dame folle
I have felt a lot like wat u felt !
still I have the thought
yet started trying!
anyway thank you!
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Wow that was a nice Poem about EYES I should say...., It was realy good...., I juz don't believe that it's your first poem,It's good....., I am not a good annotator , SO I ll just leave your poem like that.....,
i cant comment..coz u already hv 17 comments..nice
@antony a john
Thanks a lot for visiting my web
keep commenting my works
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@ranjeet
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Nice post \
@vinayak
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A simple and sweet poem. Nice outlook. :)
@Abhinav Viswambharan
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good start! :) bt my take on beauty is a lil different..
http://allsettodonothing.blogspot.com/2007/01/where-is-beauty.html
cheers!
nice romantic poem :)
@matangi
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@dan
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Hi Priya Iyer...dropped in from Matangi's
Well...I truly loved reading...u taught me how to convey things articulately wit jus a short write-up...loved those expression of emotions..and the pic was too good...hope u don mind me blog rolling u :)
P.S: Do visit my blog...hope it interests u
@rajesh
Thanks for the lovely comment!
I visited ur blog
It was good!
Neat one too!
Keep blogging
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Hi sweetie.....
Its a commendable effort.Best of luck with future efforts.
Regards,
A.Rajalaxmi
@rajalaxmi
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good one man.....nice one..i am bad at poetry but still managed
@sampath
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even i bad
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simple.. and brilliant..
Really nice di...keep it up..
@attila
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@shivasankary
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Nice poem for a first timer! Keep writing!!
@manikandan
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Hello, you site is very funny he told me to cheer up .. Merry Christmas.
Good article. Thank you.
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